Comments Assignment Example | Topics and Well Written Essays - 500 words

Comments - Assignment Example All points were on target as to the thesis, but a bit more explanation could possibly be given as to how children constitute a different culture than adults – this is not what Pratt meant when she talked about culture, so explaining the relationship as a cultural one might be a good opening paragraph. The most convincing parts were ones that helped the reader empathize with the children, and recognize that the practice is not harmless. As mentioned before, defining how children constitute a culture could use a good deal more development. Furthermore, I think it is possible that more concrete examples might have been useful – this assumes that everyone’s thanksgiving practices are the same, but indicating where these impressions emerge from might be useful – is it movies about holidays? Personal experience? Etc. The introduction was one of the best parts of the essays, because it connected Pratt’s ideas to everyday practices, like dining. This essay’s thesis is essentially that finding your way into contact zones, or learning to embrace the, can be a valuable experience and one that people should not avoid. The essay is organized largely as a personal narrative, describing the beginning in a contact zone – coming into a situation as a freshman where she felt very uncomfortable, and the subsequent development of comfort in that arena and the eventual satisfaction of forming satisfying life-long relationships, and making an incredibly successful field hockey team, with people that she at first felt uncomfortable with. This organization makes sense, but it is easy to get lost in the narrative and perhaps breaking it up into smaller paragraphs to highlight turning points would make it a much more readable essay. Most of the points were generally on place with the thesis, because this is a personal essay talking about how emerging into a difficult new